All/David,

I cloned the whitepaper and have some suggested edits and comments inlined.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1EZ2loKsmm4llh3fjB9bY_OLL8DcRT4j_mDzfNqCFZAI/edit?usp=sharing

Cheers,

Christopher Ferris

IBM Distinguished Engineer, CTO Open Technology

IBM Cloud, Open Technologies

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